Labbaik for 'umrah if she wants to perform 'umrah on behalf of her mother: "Labbaik 'umrah for my mother, accept it from me as You accepted it from Your Prophet," and so on. There is no need to add more than that, just say: "Labbaik 'umrah."
And for You, O Allah, on behalf of my mother, and for You, O Allah, on behalf of my father.
But adding "O Allah, accept it"—we say this is from the permissible gifts.
But combining it in this context, I do not know of any evidence for it. Yes, and saying out loud: "O Allah, I intend, O Shaykh?" No, the intention is in the heart, the intention is for this act of worship.
Saying the intention for the act of worship out loud is fine. May Allah reward you, Shaykh, and grant you goodness.